Published November 10, 2007
This is pretty much just about me and the guy I love.
Yea its confusing and I called him a hoe, but we call each other names so its all good.
I don't care if you think its good or bad, comment it :]
Note: I'm not good with poetry. I'm surprised I got that out.
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I'm so in love with you.
Wait, you did what with who?
Yes I've hurt you in the past.
Don't you think haven't hurt me back.
But I forgive and let go.
You don't, I'm ready for my next blow.
The past is the past.
When your ready, let it go.
Until then, I will still love you.
I just hope you will love me too.
All we do is fight, scream and yell.
I don't want to be living in this hell.
Yea its a long distance relationship.
But it still hurts with every word I take.
You think we wont grow old together.
I think we will last forever.
And I just want you to know.
I love you, you hoe.
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i thought this poem was great. i could tell your heart was writing it. honestly who cares about the format if it is written to get your feelings out. that is when you write for yourself.
great job.
kim
you obviously tried to write a good poem but i found it incredibly cliche and not well thought out. i guess if it was done really really really well, the theme could be interesting, i guess.
Funny, I thought (other than spelling.) Creative and new.... good job.
Please don't preface things, especially if it's irrelevant. Now onto the poem. A few things: skip the rhyming. It's unnecessary and a tad annoying. The whole thing could probably be summed up in the first line. Which is alright, I suppose, but it doesn't do much poetically. As something to your friend, he might appreciate it because it's tied to you, but standing alone, it doesn't say much at all.
Huh...this is interesting. I like it alot!
I didn't really notice other things like spelling at stuff. Keep it up! Good job, Bri!
Its interesting.
But generally you don't call boys hoe's... That's my way of seeing things.
Good job
~ Gwen